so one day
I came to my house
then i see my dog
with the fish in the bed
then the wall came off the wall.
It was so nice I joined them
then my dog came
he was sad cuz his bird did not
took his seeds
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- Your poem seems to speak about different types of creatures (or people) meeting up together and there being various reactions to these meetings. Sounds a lot like life to us. In fact TeenCentral has a whole section of our website dedicated to relationships if you want to take a look.
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